persuasive writing band or not

Dear mr sutton

I believe that scooters should be used inside Hornby High School because they mean people are not late to school, they give students something to do that is active and they’re smaller than bikes so it's easier to find somewhere to put them.

Scooters mean that people are not late to school because they are much faster than walking. It saves me five minutes when I scooter to school compared to walking. This is good because I’m at my class on time and my teacher isn’t angry with me.

Scooters give students something to do that is active. I think it is good for students to be scootering instead of playing with chromebooks because it will make them fitter.

Scooters are smaller than bikes and easier to put in gaps and to find somewhere to put them.

2 statement: Something to do: scooters are good for giving kids something to do around hornby high school students. It gives you a break of running everywhere around the school. It stops you from going on chromebooks at break.

3: Late. you should have scooters at school so you're not late to class when the teacher has told you to come back early and you're there early enough from the scooter.

Scooters are good for getting to class earlier, faster. It stops from being bored at home or at school Instead of going on chromebooks.

Paragraph 1. It helps you get to school less late and it will leave you in less trouble instead of being late to class It saves time inside school.  

Paragraph 2. It can give you something to do instead of sitting on chrome books 24/7. It saves you time instead of wasting time on chromebooks all day.

Paragraph 3. Its nice and easy to put away in hard places because they are small to fit in gaps. It can make you less late to class if you can fitn little places in school grounds.